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RM Greta's avatar

this is so punk rock. Absolutely love how brutal it is. Well done. I want everyone to read this.

Alex Jenkin's avatar

Ah thanks hard to know if it goes too far with these ones.

RM Greta's avatar

WHO CARES!?!?!?!? LET'S PUNCH SHIT!

Alex Jenkin's avatar

Bahaha always ❤️👊

Nav Rao's avatar

I was thinking about how to best describe this and I think punk rock is actually the best way

Tamara Casey's avatar

Amazing! Throw some beats and attitude on this, cross Kraftwerk with Slim Shady and I think you have something iconic here. Pure genius.

Nav Rao's avatar

So well done. Maybe I don't actually mind if the murderous robot has an Aussie accent.

Alex Jenkin's avatar

Haha thanks Nav, at least an Aussie death robot understands mateship 😅

Hannah Torkelson's avatar

Oh this is the hard truth. Loved this perspective!

Alex Jenkin's avatar

Yeah in a little hard on this one.. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment 😌

HEW(Hue) of Poetry's avatar

Dug this a lot. It's a wonder to me how readily the mass majority accepted constant surveillance in our homes through our phones and doorbell cameras and televisions...and how inconvenient it is to live without these things now. (Not the door cameras though, fuck those.)

Alex Jenkin's avatar

Yeah tell me about it man. I just can’t help but think of all the deals being made right now behind closed doors that determine our future.

Lee Summers's avatar

Loved this little taste of a dystopia in verse. I could see a novel or novella or novelette in verse for this!

Alex Jenkin's avatar

Thanks Lee, it was fun to try and build poems into a narrative story. I’ll definitely experiment with it more in the future 🤔